Dialogue editor: read all the lines in a small cozy game and flag what sounds stiff (about 4 hours, native English)

Kal's Valley is a small, gentle walking game in a web browser: you help a valley of neighbours get their solar drones flying again. It has about 720 lines of dialogue (around 8,000 words) across 17 characters.

We want one careful reader to go through every line on a review web page we've built and tell us which lines sound stiff, generic, written rather than spoken, out of character, or too much like another character. For those, mark "flag" with a short reason, or "suggest" and write the line the way you'd have it, keeping that character's voice.

The page groups lines by character, shows each conversation together with who's speaking to whom, and has a short note on each character (who they are, how they talk). You mark each line fine / flag / suggest. Your answers save as you go, so you can do it in several sittings.

Things that are on purpose (please don't flag): all game text is lowercase; the valley is vegetarian; words from other languages (bà nội, peddatata, odi, teta, abuela...) are deliberate.

At the end you fill in three short notes: which characters sound too alike, the three biggest problems with the writing, and anything else.

We care about honest, specific notes far more than speed. A line you flag with a clear reason is worth more than ten lines marked fine.

Writing sample (in your application): rewrite this line so it sounds like a tired gardener actually said it: "the soil remembers every season we have given it."